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Welcome to The Writer's Guild: A thread for writers, novelists, and fiction enthusiasts to discuss writing, offer writing tips, and generally hang out. Please be respectful and follow all site guidelines.

A few helpful links:
Ezn's Guide to writing fiction: https://eznguide.neocities.org/
An overview of outliners and discovery writers: http://faq.brandonsanderson.com/node/306
123 Ideas for Character Flaws: https://thewritershandbook.tumblr.com/post/136354398049/123-ideas-for-character-flaws
My personal Guide to why Google Docs is the best writing/editing tool: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1Jo1Q8Azf68jpHNi7uIDkn-9EXsp5xZOb-QcgX7xvuto/edit

I simply must update this more often. If you're looking for an ice breaker, tell us about your favorite book, your favorite world, or whatever the last story was that you put off either sleep or food to read more of.
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Das the Pranky i've begun to know a teensy weensy bit


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Friend request sent.

I don't want a good critique, i want a starry-eyed reader of fiction to devour the story and tell me if it feels.

I actually didn't have a plan or a purpose for it when i wrote it, so much as a key idea that popped into my head and i had to get it down.  Aside from a few decisions here and there, i didn't even write it so much as took dictation as it magically appeared.

Most scenes flowed into my head on my bicycle commute and when i sat down to type each day, things happened that weren't even in that day's ride.

I know basically where the next arc is heading, at least the "key idea" but i don't think it has started to come in yet because i have to complete the revision on the first portion.

Now, writing research papers and legal documents, that's where i get blocked up.


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>I don't want a good critique, i want a starry-eyed reader of fiction to devour the story and tell me if it feels.

So you want to know if you hit your goal when trying to invoke an emotion? That's a type of critique, and a good one for when you are first starting out.

I think if we get bad/'didn't care for it' type of critique too early on in a piece of work, before it's ready for it, it kind of kills your want to finish it. Like you said.

Alright, yea, I'll definitely give it a go. Send it whenever you're ready.


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Torpedo's away!


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I started in on it last night, but I wasn't able to make it too far before I needed to sleep.

I can tell you had fun writing it though.

I would like to see it after you have done a revision/final draft before I start commenting too much.

I do have some critique of it, but I don't want you to feel as if the work is bad. It's too fresh and young to be bad.

But I am trying to think of a way to deliver it constructively so you don't feel disheartened.

I might do it in the form of questions; asking you to clarify things for me. There was quite a bit that I, as a reader that isn't inside your head, was confused about. So maybe I can start with a small handful of questions about the work? Maybe just on the first part?


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oh my.


Hmm... Kindle Store doesn't  have that one. I did find "On Being Stuck" by Larraine Herring. Looks a lot like what you've been talking about. I'm going to try it out


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Are you afraid I'm going to say it was terrible?

Cause you shouldn't be. Don't be afraid of showing people your art, Lost. Only be afraid of letting your own fears about it stop you from doing it.


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i know you would never say such a thing, Ella.

completely unintelligible it seems.

i know only disapointment.

please ask your questions on the discord and we'll see if we can make it digestable.  if you have that kind of patience, thanks.


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>completely unintelligible it seems.

If you were refering ro your work, I would have to disagree. There were just details that I didn't understand, or in certain places, it was lacking details that would have helped me understand.

I will start with just a few questions later when I get home.

I do want you to know, it isn't bad. A little ruff around the edges, but that's what a first draft should be. It is also why it is a draft, and why you usually do a few of them.

I very much enjoyed the enthusiasm that came across through the writimg. Like I said earlier, I could tell you had a lot of fun writing it, and that in turn made it enjoyable for me to read.


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Well if you found it enjoyable, then i did this too.

I promise this one's just terrible, check it out



I passed out :x



I warned you


Lol, no I mean last night. I was going to do the discord.

Then I made the mistake of laying down.


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Ah issok, i thot you meant my songwriting/playing/singing attempt was so bad it floored you, tee hee.

it's only like 30 seconds so I didn't know it would be such powerful stuff


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Responded to you in Discord


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>You have to sign into to open office writer now to use it

Ah what the hell is this bullshit? I thought open office writer was something just built into the computer, not connected to the internet?

Goddamnit windows.

Back to paper and pencil I go then. Or maybe an old fashioned typewriter.


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I'm dumb.

You can skip signing in.


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hello writer's guild!

...i have been working on something very personal. i shared it with Chrome, who is an amazing editor pony.

i sort of want to share it here too, but it is pretty personal, and it is not a story.


something you'll be speaking, by chance?


If you feel comfortable Moony, we would love to read it :3


no, though... that is something i have to prepare for too. That's... on Saturday. and i have a lot to think about that as well, now that you mention it...


you are so kind, Ella enchanted <3

it is... my personal philosophy of life. Something i had meant to write down for many years, but only just recently got around to doing, i think.

i am afraid though it will not be so interesting a read.


I see...

I hope it all goes right for you and your family.


thank you pranky. you are so very kind too.


I'm away from my comp, but just wanted to let you know I'm not ignoring you.

I just got sick last night and haven't been feeling too well the past few days. I'll respond when I can.


I tend to think all writing is personal writing, and a bit of anxiety over sharing something you meant to share in the first place is just a sign that sharing it is *that* important to you.


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i've thought about it, and i think i will share it. i am wondering how others will feel about it. maybe, i can learn from them and grow as a person!


My personal philosophy.


Very well done.

One may feel obliged to ask what suffering brought about the writing and the sharing of it.


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i know i have a habit of being very insular. it is not that i do not wish to tell you, but rather, i do not want you to have to feel pity or sympathy for me: i do not want to add to your, or any other person's, burdens.

But as for why now to write and share... well, there are big changes coming up in my life. It started with Grandma passing... sort of, in an indirect way. Perhaps, it will mean soon, my ordeal is over, and that has me nervous, but optimistic, but also scared, as fate does not favor me in situations where i am optimistic like this


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oh... but i should say, i am grateful for your praise! ...what... did you think? i worry it sounds really crazy and stuff.


Your... ordeal?

I thought it was quite professional. I agree on many of the shortcomings of certain systems and I do feel you've come up with a satisfying alternative.

Though I must say that sometimes you have a habit of looking for ways to discredit your own suffering.


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Hey Lost, are you still checking this thread?

I haven't seen you post in a while.


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He is currently banned, I think.



I'll just try and get on my Discord tomorrow then.

If I don't get called into work ;_;

Anyways, thanks Mondo


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Yeah, his ban ought to be up soon, I think.  So maybe just poke him about it if you need to.


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I got another idea today while I was at work, but when I got home I was too tired to write it.

I did, however, remember to text the gist of it to myself so I don't completely forget it.

Maybe I should start using my ten minute break to quickly write a bit of the idea down.


What did you come up with?


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There is this one adult character that was a heavy part of the main characters life back when I was doing the rp, and I've been trying and trying to figure out a way that they could be introduced in the story, realistically.

Well, I had been tossing around the idea that the main character try and steal something from the guy, [the guy owns and runs a restaurant, so it would probably be something like food], and the guy chase the kid out the door. [kid is the main character]

Well, I think what I'll do is have the kid drop his sketchpad, or have it fall out of his back pack. And in the sketchpad is a bunch of pictures of other kids, and all of these kids have gone up missing or found dead. So the guy suddenly takes a big interest in this kid and why he has all these pictures of other missing kids, so the next time he sees him, he starts following him.

And without knowing it, the kid leads him to either an old abandoned building, or under a bridge. And in this place, there are all these drawings carved into the pavement and walls. They very in what they are, but mostly make up things like a shoe, a teddy bear, a lolly pop, a toy car, etc. Not like graffiti, but actual things.

The guy ends up staring at them, having lost the kid, and eventually recognizes one of the symbols from one the sketches in the notebook. And the symbol is a toy that was found on a dead child in the recent news.

After this, the guy does some light investigative work through his customers and maybe a regular cop that comes in as a customer, and eventually finds out that the place he found is a type of memorial.

He goes back to the place eventually to wait and see if he can find the kid, and when he does, he returns the sketchpad and tells the kid he will give him work so that he doesn't have to steal food.


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That sounds like quite a story you're cooking up.


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I have a dream~


No bigarse paintings of the Candyman in there?


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Heh, no. I want to present it as a very serious scene, and the 'memorial' is meant to come across similar to the walls on which they have soldiers names.

We'll see if I can paint the scene well enough to get the emotion I want.


Nothing not-serious about "the Candyman, bitch."

But yeh, I getcha.


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Man, I don't want to jinx it, but I think I finally got out of my block. I've been writing consistently for the past few days, and it's actually been fun again. That type of fun that I really missed about it.

I think I just need to not force myself to do it until later down the road, when I actually have things to edit. But even then, I've always enjoyed editing too, so maybe that won't be so bad.


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I just got onto discord. I tried deleting the message where you linked to your google doc, but it wouldn't let me, or I couldn't figure it out. Probably something to do with the message I tried to send you just now not going through. If you want to try and delete that those messages it would probably let you.

And, as a last thing, if I angered you in some way, I would have much preferred you just told me instead of messaging me in the way you did.

I apologize if I read into your message wrong, but that it was what came off to me as; like you were angry with me.


a lost pony is very sorry for his behavior.

I was very hurt for reasons that were mostly delusional and based on little to no actual things in reality.  I am not well adjusted and working every day for many weeks in a row and was only trying to isolate and curl up into a hurt little ball.  Moony talked to me at great length afterwards and helped me.

I know my words and actions were hurtful and i didn't mean them to be.  I am not dealing well with social interactions outside of work.

If you still want private communications with a lost pony then accept the friend request i've sent.  I understand if you don't want to.  Again i'm very sorry.


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I accept your apology, Lost. For the time being, I think it might be better if we kept our communications to the chan.

I'm sorry if that comes across as callous or cold, but we really don't have much reason to use more private platforms.

I mean, I hardly use discord as it is, and only rarely for things like sharing projects like that.

I hope you don't take it to heart, and I sincerely hope you get better and have luck and happiness in your job.

I am not mad at you, and I will see you around.



as you wish

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